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I've been doing Fathead for almost 7 months now, so I'd really like some tough critique. In return for this, I'll critique your comic back.

The art of style is definitely whimsical, and simplistic. In a good way, it shows that you have artistic skill opposed to how styles like that tend to look.

The writing on the other hand is a little bit dry, mind you I did snicker at a few of them. But it just doesn't seem to be my kind of humour.

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Yea I'll agree the humor falls a little flat with me, too. You also have reoccurring characters that seem pretty lifeless, or lack depth. I'm with Uglulyx and will say it's not my brand of humor.

Thanks for feedback guys, I'll get on with my feedback asap.

hmmm, well I like the characters and art and expressions, they're pretty funny and effective.

But for many of the punchlines, the payoff wasn't that good and they weren't that funny for me.

The koala one's really funny, when it has that kind of humor it works, but like the mirror one, and many others, way too subtle for me

I really like your simplistic art style. It suits the kind of comic you seemingly want to achieve. The art part is def. the stronger part of your comic.

The humor, however, as subjective as it is, is not always the kind of stuff I'd excpect or would like to read. You really need to work on the punchlines or the jokes as a whole. Here is something where you can improve.

Fathead, as a whole, is worth the occasional read.

I'm actually going to come in here and defend the humor. I really like the dry, obscure jokes and almost every strip gets a smile out of me, or a "oh man, that's clever" thought going through my head. Which is so much better than the slapstick or random goofy character that everyone loves. I love the dynamic of Fathead and Jeff. It just works really well and I think the writing is the strongest part of the comic. GRANTED, dry humor will get you less, a lot less, of a fanbase than a more mainstream humor choice. But I wouldn't change the type of humor for Fathead to appeal to bigger general public. It's fine as it is, it's just got a niche audience. I would start a new project if you want to test out a different approach to writing comedy.

Now my criticism is more about the art. The style is fine, it's charming and simple and fun, and really, I don't think studying life drawings or skeletal charts or whatever is going to make it stronger really, but I think you should try to push the art in it and try a few new things here and there. Line variation would be nice, because the large percentage of your lines are very bold and stand out. And that might make it easier to add in more details. You use flash to make your comics, correct? It would be fairly easy to vary your line width. Also, a bit of shading here and there might look nice and make the art pop a little more. It's not that the art is boring, it's just first of all, monochrome for the most part, and for a gag a day, it gets a little boring to look at the same few shades of grey for 90+ pages.

But yeah, those are just my suggestions. It might not do anything for you, but I do really like Fathead and I always find it funny.

I actually really enjoy the humor as well. I know I commented way back that the humor was not really my thing, I don't usually gravitate to gag-a-day type comics. But really every time I have checked out your comic recently I have always been amused with the page.

Working my way through returning critique now. X_X

More critique is welcome!

I'm 6 in and I've laughed 4 times and smiled at the others.

The composition in the last panel is odd, and I don't like the dialogue covering up the punchline: 9

This one has a pretty weak punchline (the kind that works better as a Simpsons throwaway than by itself): [url=fatheadcomic.com/comics/17]17[/url]

And here, his tears look... odd: 21

I'd say the important thing is to make sure the art always immediately communicates. Keep the compositions VERY clear and maybe make things like cartoon tears and bit more standardly recognizable.


But those are nits. Overall, I think the strip is pretty fantastic. Especially ones like this: 26

You need more fart jokes. And violence. Other than that it's great.

You might want to consider running a story. From my experience they help maintain readership.

Alright, I just read through your comics... and it was actually enjoyable!

The good parts of your comic are: the simple art style, the delivery and the punchline. Even if some of the jokes fall flat, it still was fun to read!

My favorite would be the Santa Claus one and those bees.

As for the bad parts, the only problem would be when the joke falls flat... like the Narwhal one... it felt unfinished because it feels like there was something else supposed to happen afterwards.

Overall though, good job and keep doing what you do!

I really like you're comic, the art style suits the humour and when ever I read it, even if there is a joke that's not really that funny I still manage to be entertained and leaves me with a smile on my face. However if I had to say one thing it'll be that the thickness of the pen you use does seem a bit big, but if that's a style choice you're going for then I suppose it's cool. I guess having a big pen can be a little bit inconvenient when you're trying to put a bit more depth into the drawings like shading and extra features. But if it works for you, then why not!

I don't really like Gag-a-Day comics, but I checked yours out and I found myself laughing or smiling at the comics. And I don't really have a problem with the art.