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"Someone can correct my mistakes?", 19th Apr 2011, 3:02 PM #1
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Hello, my friend told me there were many grammar mistakes in my comics. I can't seem to find many. Can someone help me? It'd be really appreciated.
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19th Apr 2011, 4:44 PM #2
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I did a quick look through the comic and I gotta say... Your friend must be on drugs, I found no spelling or grammar mistakes through your comic.

I enjoyed it too, so have a cookie.
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19th Apr 2011, 5:10 PM #3
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Loool, I was starting to get worried. I thought that my English went that bad that i couldn't even find mistakes. Thx a lot!
19th Apr 2011, 5:57 PM #4
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I can barely speak my native language (English), but I think you're missing commas and periods in a few places like "It's time, guys." And "You killed all my family King Ricario" seems better phrased this way: "You killed my entire family, King Ricario." Family is a singular noun, so "all my family" sounds mismatched to my ear.
19th Apr 2011, 10:43 PM #5
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Chapter one:
Page 2: Accused of treason
Page 3: same again.
Page 5: Against, not agaist.

Chapter two:
Page 2: Give an order to which everyone has to obey
Commander Wildbear to give them to random farmers
I'm not sure to be I'd be able to find
Page 5: Co-operating
Page 6: Broken up with you

Chapter three:
Page 4: Proof, not proofs
Page 8: Hey, you've become pretty good at talking. (Alternately, 'got', but become is better)

Chapter four:
Page 1: I'm a useless trash. (Alternately, I'm a useless piece of trash)
Page 3: Now you're going to pay (although I suspect that 'gonna' will remain)
Page 6: Heroes' horses?
Page 8: I'll take you all on all at once
Page 9: I'll first sell you
A village where to we can start living like little farmers



General: not many commas; missing a fair few sentence-ending punctuation marks.


Most of these were pretty nitpicky - so, sorry if I've come across as a jerk here...I didn't mean to be, but you asked somebody to point out issues...these were the ones that I found.

I mean, I could go more in depth, I guess...but the other stuff was stylistic, more about composition, complexity, and redundancy, than grammar or spelling, so...

...hope I helped, at least a little bit!



Also, cool story! I liked the simplistic art, and I wish it weren't over...
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19th Apr 2011, 11:56 PM #6
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Yeah I agree, some of those mistakes look pretty obvious. The commas, for example, i don't even know why i didn't put them. Thanks again!
20th Apr 2011, 12:30 AM #7
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Jrade:Chapter one:
Page 2: Accused of treason
Page 3: same again.
Page 5: Against, not agaist.

Chapter two:
Page 2: Give an order to which everyone has to obey
Commander Wildbear to give them to random farmers
I'm not sure to be I'd be able to find
Page 5: Co-operating
Page 6: Broken up with you

Chapter three:
Page 4: Proof, not proofs
Page 8: Hey, you've become pretty good at talking. (Alternately, 'got', but become is better)

Chapter four:
Page 1: I'm a useless trash. (Alternately, I'm a useless piece of trash)
Page 3: Now you're going to pay (although I suspect that 'gonna' will remain)
Page 6: Heroes' horses?
Page 8: I'll take you all on all at once
Page 9: I'll first sell you
A village where to we can start living like little farmers



General: not many commas; missing a fair few sentence-ending punctuation marks.


Most of these were pretty nitpicky - so, sorry if I've come across as a jerk here...I didn't mean to be, but you asked somebody to point out issues...these were the ones that I found.

I mean, I could go more in depth, I guess...but the other stuff was stylistic, more about composition, complexity, and redundancy, than grammar or spelling, so...

...hope I helped, at least a little bit!



Also, cool story! I liked the simplistic art, and I wish it weren't over...


That's our Jrade! :D
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20th Apr 2011, 1:24 AM #8
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XD Last time I take a look at a comic for spelling mistakes late at night. Way to go Jrade.
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20th Apr 2011, 6:19 AM #9
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Heheh, I'm just magic...I actually went back in time, and then inserted the mistakes!


...or something...
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