Aran_Froggatt:And here we go! Another pinup, this time for GIL. I like this one.
I really like Raven, she's just badass!
JuicyGrey, you're next according to the list.
However, I think it's a little arrogant of you to curtly tell me to change my hosting provider, and then inform me that I'm doing a pinup for you with no references.
Could you please choose a character, or a selection of a few with some references?
Woohooo! SO SAVED! Wow man good stuff. A lot of attention to detail! The garb, the muscle tone... and talk about an absolutely perfect tattoo job! I like how you went for "old style" Raven, gotta get that eyepatch back somehow ^^'
Thanks a ton! I guess I'll be preparing something for you soon enough :)
Ok, here goes my review of The Sovereigncy by Rayne/NearMintMill. Instead of your average analysis, this will be a recollection of my experience as a reader. I'm going to ramble like a madman, buckle up.
[spoiler]First page, let's go: Woaaaoh my god! Impressive. Straight up. Love the art. Top stuff. The narration introducing us into this world... epic, rich. I'm liking this. I'm in.
Holy Moses, decapitation on page 3!! Oh boy! Bet this is going to be action-packed too! I'm in for a treat! I mean, this world looks amazing and original, with it's blend of technology and fantasy. and these people look like they're out of a fashion sketchbook. Digging it.
Around 10 pages in: woh woh... I think I got like, completely lost. Those were a lot of names, and a lot of similar faces and designs! Am I just retarded? Is this too highbrow for me? *spends a willpower point to force focus* I'm not giving up! Just power through, it'll make sense soon enough.
Around 30 pages in: Erhm nope. the struggle is real. Every character has one or two clones that look almost exactly like them. Nate, Bella, Missa, Seb, Carus... urhm... veggie guy? Shit, that's all I got. I get the gist of what's going on, ofc. And hell, it's pretty clear this world was full of life even before you decided to put it on paper. But I feel like I'm lost in the middle of an ocean. The surface of it, to be precise. I want to go deep so bad, but it just refuses me. I float. We all float down here.
I get to the Arx's powers and characteristics pages: an actual piece of land I can put my feet on! Great! My god, this lore is something else. I'm jelly, my world looks like a baby thought it up under 5 minutes in comparison. The art... bet you've heard it a zillion times, but you're gifted. Proper kudos.
Waaaay ahead: killing off Missa like that... not cool. It just felt so cheap! And the fact that Saren made it and she didn't... I was salty. I really liked her. Witty Nate can't make up for this, even if he so dreamy. Attone.
End of chapter 1: Seriously, chapter? More like book! I won't lie, it took everything I had as a reader to get here. Again, I'm sure you've heard it almost as much as the high praise for your art and page design, and probably as much as your questionable choices in font and bubble art too... Chapter one is dense as a neutron star.
I've read all of chapter 2 too, btw. You clearly learned a lot from your past mistakes. Focusing on Jake and Kass, smart. A more contained story that lets us appreciate the characters and develop a connection to them. You know you're on the right path, like blindfolded Kass. Not much more to say on that. Well, that Red is cool, I guess.
I got the feeling throughout the comic that even though you have more than enough talent to deal with them, you don't really enjoy making action scenes. It's "People talk: the Webcomic" syndrome. You had so many great and powerful characters in there, amazing magical powers, guns and tech, and what did we get in the end? I mean, at one point Nate and Saren just start talking in the middle of a fight, completely chill, and devour all the focus. I laughed in frustration. The end bomb scene was pretty anticlimatic too, with the aforementioned bad on bad crime. It's like you look for a quick way out, instead of embracing the action. I'd say your work not only needs more of it, it's begging for it.
Regarding this, I had a sort of epiphany re-reading the comic... your main world elements are light/dark/order/chaos, very untraditional, mostly metaphysical/conceptual rather than the usual physical ones... that says a lot about you and your work right off the bat. You need some Earth, Wind, Water and mostly Fire in this thing. And in you. You are so close to complete and indisputable greatness it's not even funny.
Oh my, I think this review got out of control. Anyway, I hope I wasn't too harsh, please forgive me. I could have sung some typical praise and overall just be conventional, but I couldn't resist going a bit nuts. You're a very gifted visual artist, and a master crafter of Worlds (are you actually a team, or is this just one person? I'm not sure) please don't feel discouraged. This is just the opinion of a man who likes boobs and violence. At any rate, you do excellent work, and with a small shift in balance you could achieve universal acclaim, a possibility other lesser mortals like myself can only dream of. [/spoiler]
I don't really get how this is a thing. First of all, the layouts easily save your last page read, so there's that. And logic dictates that if you really enjoy something, you would want as much of it as possible. With a predictable pace like that you can always wait to read a good chunk anyway.
Sure, you could do bulk updates. But then you lose that page by page focus. I like my regular readers to appreciate every single page I put out for what it is. I don't expect a lot of comments anyway.
Ofc people like me who do 3D stuff or artists with a lighter style are the only ones who can keep up indefinitely with this. I spend around 3 hours on each page, and creating a buffer is easy.
On a side note, I've never unsubscribed from a series because "it updates too often". That doesn't make much sense to me. But I have unsubbed from works I can easily access anyway (always in a pop tab) and didn't fully read. Only subbing when you're hungering for an update seems sensible.
I'm in! I've seen these a couple of times and always been tempted to join, so... why not?
-Never reviewed anything in CF.
-Read the first 100 pages. If you want to stop there, that's my bad. You can start here. (Read right to left)
-[V!S!L!N!] It's violent & naughty rather than porny & gory I'd say (chapter 2 was seriously toned down some months ago!)
-Of course, I'll review any tags, even full-blown erotic works.
I have "milestones", events that will happen. How and when, that's open to change.
Being able to adapt to your audience's reactions is essential, at least to me. Also characters have a habit of acquiring a life of their own and adding to the story in ways you would not expect.
Without a solid guideline it's easy to get lost, though, so I would say... find a balance.
I personally dislike 4th wall breaking. Can't really think of a single instance that I enjoyed. I basically endure them. So my answer would be: never. Sorry!
And as mentioned, pop culture references are a no-go, unless you want your work to feel dated in mere months.
I guess I was lucky, I got my first two resident commenters exactly one day after I started posting my comic here. Jamie59 was technically the first, and to this day he's the most regular commenter. God bless him :)
It's always hard for people to break the ice, a remarkable scene usually helps. In my case, it was a guy getting his head blown off :P
I reply to every comment. At first I didn't, but after some commenting on other people's comics I realized it's pretty cool to be acknowledged by the author and interact with them, even if it's just a simple, short thing. Granted, sometimes it's extremely hard to reply. I've spent more time than I'm confortable admitting trying to figure out some answers.
Tenmesh, Queen of Rage, Archdemon of the Yomi Plane:
Even though I'm using bits and pieces from several games on her, I like to think it's a somewhat original design.
[NSFW]There's some pierced nipples in there, but not of the sexy kind :/
[spoiler]Well you take the cake as the strangest case I've ever heard of! You're not supposed to be able to move you know, much less hit "it". Makes me wonder who's actually being tormented here. You have traits and attitudes rarely seen in people who experience these, if ever. It would be interesting to confirm you actually move and talk, instead of just perceiving it. It doesn't matter much in a practical sense though.
Names are not important, but these things seem to feed on fear, not lust, so what you're seeing makes sense. Otherwise it wouldn't really be a problem at all, would it? At any rate, sounds like you'll be fine.[/spoiler]
For anyone not too familiar with sleep paralysis, I'd recommend the documentary called "The Nightmare". Good luck with that though, it's probably the scariest thing I've ever seen.
@WanderingJew: [spoiler]You're kind of lucky and unlucky at the same time. I have a friend who's been suffering pretty devastating sleep paralysis for the past 15 years. It's literally killing him. He gets it 2-3 times a week, but he doesn't see anything. Just feels a menacing presence. He says the fear it makes him feel is so intense, it's not like he's going to die... it's like he's just been killed.
I find it interesting that you sort of worship the entity that torments you. First thing that came into my mind is that it probably appeases it. Don't be fooled thinking it's just your imagination, though. It's not.
My friend has had this so many times he has developed the skill to actually talk (in a very weird voice with barely any air to work with) while he's having them. Originally to get his girlfriend to wake him up. He's a stubborn one, and probably one of the few people in the world who can do this. It's a bit odd though, he does perceive his surroundings and can talk, but he can't remember most of what happens during the paralysis itself, or what he said.
Recently, he found an app that records any sound outbursts you make at night, clearly something designed by someone who has this problem too. I've heard his recordings, they're incredibly disturbing. At any rate, he recorded something quite interesting not too long ago: after what sounds like a conversation, he says "greetings from the ethereal, the ethereal, THE ETHEREAL!" in a very slow and deliberate way. Almost like he was being forced to. It has happened twice as far as I know.
These things are smart enough to know they're under surveillance.[/spoiler]
I think I'm a lucky one. I've had a ton of these experiences. Let me share with you a few significant ones.
Believe it or not, these all happened.
[spoiler]My parents bought a house previously owned by a what the neighbours described as a "witch". Basically just a lone woman who read Tarot cards and held strange rituals with candles and a white robe some nights. The interesting bit is that her name was the same as my small sister. That became relevant when some years after moving in she started having weird experiences. At first it was just a very creepy voice that she recorded by accident playing the guitar. I still have that around... "Do you want to fly?" Then, one night, she came into my room panicked, convinced someone was calling her from the living room. After that she started sleeping with my mother in another room.
A week after that, I go to bed and start to hear a strange hum in my ear. The hum slowly but surely gets not only louder, but more clear. It's someone calling my name. Up to the point it's a shout in my head... over and over. I panic, turn the lights on, and say out loud "I'm not who you're looking for... she's on the other side of the house". I was 14 years old, cut me some slack. Still, not my proudest moment. Anyway a few seconds later I heard a blood chilling shout from the room my mother and sister where sleeping in. My sis had entered a state that could easily be described as "possesed". I will never forget how my mother was flailing her arms around her, in shock, trying to dispel whatever it was that had a hold on her.
The event lasted for something like an hour. My sisters pulse was so high my parents feared for her life. She talked too, her eyes vacant. She kept describing this woman that was in front of her, beckoning. At one point, she told us grandpa had come and started talking to the woman. He made her leave. Then grandpa showed my sister a drawing she had made some years ago and left. Shortly after that, it all ended. My mother started crying uncontrollably. Turns out she put that picture on my grandpa when they buried him. Nobody knew but her.
My sister forgot everything about that night for seven years. She now remembers some of it, but vaguely.[/spoiler]
[spoiler]When I was 18 I started working in one of my father's companies. Warehouse stuff. It was draining. At the time I was also lifting weights like a madman and had a bit of a short fuse so to speak. One day, I returned home after work. I was still living at my parent's house. Oddly, nobody was home. The computer was in a common room, so I threw my shoes away and sat at it.
I was completely concentrated on my early internet slow as hell browsing when I felt I was being watched. The feeling was so strong it completely burst my bubble so to speak. I knew nobody was home, and well... I was already quite familiar with the strange events that happened at this house from time to time. But I had no patience for "them" this time around. I got up a loudly yelled at the nothingness. "Fuck off, leave me the fuck alone!! Fuck you all!" in hindsight, not a smart move.
My parents house has 2 floors, and I was on the lower one. Right after I yelled, I clearly heard heavy footsteps above me, as if someone started running accross the top floor, coming straight at (over) me. Thing is, I was mad. But all that rage energy just vanished in an instant. I had enough strength to close the door to the room I was in and grab a phone to call my sister. It really freaked me out.
Some years later I was living elsewhere and dropped by to visit. During a chat with my mother, we started talking about ghosts and stuff. She then told me about an incident that happened some months before. Both my parents, my sister and her boyfriend where watching a movie on the lower floor when suddenly they started hearing some heavy, loud footsteps on the upper one, as if someone was running all around. They were so scared they called the police. My father and the boyfriend went upstairs to check for intruders. They found nothing. No evidence of any doors or windows having been opened. After she described what they heard, it was clear to me who that was.
I call it "the runner".[/spoiler]
[spoiler]During my twentys I lived alone in an apartment. I became addicted to World of Warcraft and rarely went outside. It got pretty bad.
My grandmother died. She had been senile for years and I hadn't seen her in a while. I was a troubled young man back then. To me, it was more important to get a "perdition's blade" drop that weekend than to attend her funeral. So I didn't.
Some days after, I went to bed after I finished another exhausting online session. I was very tired and wasn't really thinking about anything. I would have been asleep in seconds, but suddenly, I opened my right eyelid in a very weird way, completely. Almost as if I didn't actually do it myself. And there it was. A bright, orangy-golden light floating above my bed, in a corner. Strange flows kept swirling in and around it. I looked right into the light, and I saw my grandma's face. Not literally, but in my mind. It's hard to describe. I instantly knew it was her, with no room for doubt. I got so scared I closed my eyes and stayed under the blanket for a full hour, begging forgiveness.[/spoiler]
Listen to Youtube videos mostly, sometimes podcasts. My favourite go-tos are Two Best Friends, Red Letter Media, Critical Role and Game Grumps. When I'm writing dialogue though, it has to be music. I'm big into synthwave and future funk lately.