My least favorite aspect of this comic would be the setting. It seems to be sort of LoTR inspired, with generically medieval, European buildings, with occasional fancy wizard tower type buildings (there's one tower in the comic that looks kinda like Sarumon's tower). This setting isn't bad (it worked pretty well in LoTR and The Hobbit, obviously) but I am just so incredibly tired of it. When I read fantasy I want to see something new and exciting, not just the same ideas repeated again and again.
There's also been a trend lately to take a basically Tolkienesque setting, but then for some reason add modern racial allegory and apparently some kind of drug war, for some reason. Characters selling the medieval version of meth just doesn't make much sense to me because the drug trade (and especially the drug war) is an inherently modern phenomenon. Running a profitable drug cartel of the 20th century variety depends on certain conditions: dense population centers, disposable income among the lower classes, large scale farming or some kind of industrial production, international travel/trade (or at least fast and high volume local trade), and some other factors. Without these factors, it would be hard to run a modern sort of criminal organization. Having these drug businesses behave as criminal gangs also implies a strong central state with a large standing military/police force, which wasn't really common in medieval times. Governments of that period were fairly small & basic, they didn't really have the interest or ability to create and enforce many laws of that type. Once you add all these factors to your setting, you aren't really in the dark ages anymore, you're more in the enlightenment period, at least. Yet in every single way besides this, the setting seems to be in the dark ages. So I have some doubts about how logical your setting is.
Historical anachronism can be an interesting thing. But if you're not careful it can break the believability of the setting too much, and I'm worried you're headed in that direction. If you're going to create an illogical setting, I wish you'd at least make it a new and interesting type, instead of just generic fantasy. I feel like you could be putting your talents to better use. Aside from my doubts about the setting though, this is some very good work.
Thank you for your review, I'm genuinely concerned about the issue now.
I wouldn't say that the setting here is all that dark age to be honest. I mostly looked for late medieval stuff for arms and armor (things around XV century) with occasional stuff from other eras (fantasy allows for it), homes in the city are mostly inspired by Ubersreik from Vermintide (wfb is pretty much early renaissance/late medieval), andas you said, there are more centralised governments.
I wasn't aiming for lotr feel even if that tower may convince you otherwise, Im rather going for low fantasy. By "generic fantasy" I, personally, understand the abudance of magic, bizzare fairy stuff and overt decoration of everything, while myself going for more mundane, poor,gritty aestetic and simplistic character design. Although fantasy is that kind of genre, this stuff has been done a lot, too, only I think it isnt too overdone yet (I also love it)
Now that's some massively creative way to reproduce. Are these from the actual mythology?
Oops, looks like I missed.
I'm not sure if it is a concious stylistic choice, but when you draw somewhat realist-ish women (or pretty much anybody tbh) with such proportions, especially the mouth, it doesn't look as good as it can.. It looks just like a toad mouth and I often notice it, done by people of vatying skill. I think more realistic proportions would better fit your style and tone, if you want my opinion.
Ahhh, that makes a lot of sense, actually.
When you click on someone's "comic profile", you're taken to a page that has a bit of information. On the left is the comic avatar (the one that shows up on the main page whenever you update). You have a picture of Ricardo's rat friend here. On the right is the comic description (and this is what people talk about when they refer to profile page).
Here's a screeshot of the comic Mundane Maria:
Notice how they also have a small description under their comic avatar (on the left). The description for the comic is interesting, hints at the dynamic between siblings, and tells us what the main plot is going to be. A non-magic person in a magical world. Having a de-powered protagonist makes for a unique story.
And here's a screenshot of the comic Battle Kreaturez:
Notice they also have a short description under the comic avatar (to the left). Their comic description has a different format, immediately outlining the genre and main story focus.
Now here's yours:
You've got that small description by your comic avatar, which makes me think there's going to be a lot fo conflict. But you don't have a comic profile!
Comics are a fusion of both art and story. The comic avatar and your banner display your art - but what's the story about? This forum has had a couple of discussions on story vs art, and a lot of people admit they read for the story, not necessarily the art. Story is important. And your comic has a fascinating story so far - so pitch it! :) Why should I read your story? What's it about? What's the genre/theme? Go ahead and just click on a bunch of comic profiles from the front page of Comicfury one day to see how other people arrange their profile. Everyone has a different way of doing it, but the main point is to try and hook readers. (Looking at your subscriber count I suspect you don't have an issue with that anyways, haha, but a comic profile is still good!!)[/spoiler]
Oh, I see. I had something in mind, only need to write them properly.
Thank you very much for your review! It was a huge pleasure to read, something I rarely see in a morning's internet check. Very detailed and long. I only had a feeling you focused on the positives too much, but that's just me.
It might be good to add a comic profile at least, because a lot of people read that before deciding if they want to check out a comic; your profile is actually blank!
I'll sure do that as soon as I come up with a decent description. Is there anything else other than that, though? People keep saying "profile" so there has to be something more to it, but I fail to nitice (maybe it's the banner?)
One of the curiousities of this story is that there's both anthropomorphic characters and humans, but they intermingle in all the scenes. In a lot of stories where there's both species, there always seems to be themes of discrimination from the humans to the anthropomorphic race. Instead of humans vs furries, something else is hinted at.
Every "animal" character is anthropomorpized in a similar fasion based on a respective animal, so humans get their own "de-anthropomorphized" version of themselves (instead of, you know, evolving from monkeys. That "furry vs humans" thing has been done to death, as you said, so in fact, humans here are just as "furry" as anyone else. There is no real reason to it other than that I like it that way, and that I can afford it, because fantasy.
What's curious is that he's obviously in motion, but the rope is slack? If he's running across the wall and pulling himself, or if he's swinging himself, the rope would be taut.
Lol I never really thought about it. I think the initial idea was that he pulled the rope one time and then just flew in a free jump, with rope waving. It was a dream after all so any surreal shit would go.
Next is this speech bubble:
Oh yeah, i've been called out on that before, I watch my speech bubbles now.
And last is just a teeny observation. There's background characters in a lot of the scenes, but only one scene with women shows up - when the fox is talking about how much gold/loot and "hot chicks" (hah!) he's going to make. This area sort of looks like the slums, with a lot of very miserable folks and patched up clothing. So far, the only women to appear have been in someone's fantasy.
Oh yeah, I only noticed that while drawing page 20, where the last crowd was. Back then I thought there would be more crowds and I'd mix in a couple of women there (Originally in this dialogue two guys would just walk past backgrounds discussing things, I also threw some stuff out of it). Anyway, this society, while not really medieval, isn't exactly as progressive as XXI century first world, so at night I guess most women would be at home rather than in a place full of thugs like this.
Don't worry though, there definitely will be women, including actually strong ones. One of the four leads is a woman by the way, she just isn't introduced yet.
A strange creature follows him, but it's difficult to tell what significance of this creature is. It seems to be making weird faces more than anything. But maybe there isn't any significance to this stalker-creature, because it looks like our hero wakes up out of a dream partway through this event!
You really don't need to draw grass that way. It shouldn't be so eqully dispersed all over the background, just through a little grass here and there, the viewer's brain will make up the rest intuitively, and it won't distract his attention either. Also the nope girl's pose looks kinda stiff, I'd drag her right leg somewhat further behind (look up the poses of running cycle)
All the rest is fairly decent, I should say, i like how you did graphic ink shading.
I like almost everything about this comic. Mood's great. World's interesting, original and high-concept. Excellent visual storytelling. Anatomy and perspective's very good. Colour's good too. I don't normally like a sketchy/raggedy inking style but it works here.
Your layouts are cool as balls. You use a lot of unconventional panels without overdoing it. Page 6 is my jam. Also page 19 made me laugh.
I think the only thing I'd criticise is your dialogue - it can be a bit confusing in places. You tell a story with pictures beautifully and clearly, but with your text it stalls a little. I'd also try and do your lettering a bit more elegantly - in a comic so good-looking your flat balloons stand out a bit. I also noticed a load of typos - proof-read, dude!
A fantasy comic that tries to introduce you to a world visually is my kind of comic, my friend. Really refreshing.
Thank you very much!
Do you mean just lettering, or writing as whole? And what ways to make baloons non-flat but still readable would you suggest?