Zero Hour:I have read the strange separation of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde
For the compliment: I like your warm colour pallet and your panel disposition is good, your shading seems on point any the calendar had a nice duck on it.
I think your action scenes could use some work to be more impactful thought.
Here's a fanart of Eduardo Ed II Junior the Smoll (in my headcanon that's what he's called) Image
AAAAH! Thank you so much! And this is a lovely fanart of the baby boi (&KNUCKLES)
But yes, I suspected as much. I'm trying to work on my action scenes but I suppose to perfect them will take practice, studying good comic action scenes, more practice and a lot of dedication.
Again, thank you for the critique and taking time to read through my comic. I'll try my best to put your advice to good use.
I believe an honest critique would be good for me. First few pages are a mess, and I am aware of that since I was still trying to find my footing and experimenting with art-style, fonts and bubble placement. But I would love nothing more than to get feedback on how to improve and build on my comic's current state.
Excluding the extras and holiday special illustrations, the Comic is currently 41 pages long, so a rather short read. I try to build an overarching mystery but I also want the story to be easy to follow (if that makes sense). I hope people that both have and haven't read the Strange Case of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde will be able to enjoy this as a standalone adaptation, but I am worrying I am complicating things too much.
I always have trouble naming my webcomics too... But I tried focusing on the story. And what would it be all about. I thought that since it would take place in Lawrence's Voodoo Curiosity shop, I decided to name it simply Curiosity Shop to avoid writing too much. There were so many things I had to leave out of the title but I added a subtitle to go with it; "A deliciously (because demons need to feed on souls and sometimes blood in my comic) demonic (Because... DEMONS!) webcomic"
So... that's how I came up with the name... Took me a while but-
I would like to know what you think of my comic so far. Does it seem good? Does the plot seem too slow-paced?
Are the characters dull? Go ahead fire at me! I might be 15 but I don't get butthurt too easy. XD
Anyways, jokes aside, I am looking for an honest critique, not "WOAH!!11!1 So c00lio! 11/10" or "Yer Com|c is ShET!11!1!1 1/2000000"
Okay I did not get too much out of those critiques.... But I think so far, I liked the advise about worm's and bird's view. Can't change the pannels nor the fact that they turn completely black and white because I want to give my comic a manga feel to it, I also tried using the more detailed hands on the characters but... since they are cartoonish with anime proportions it just looks SUPER weird. Using three dots too much is kinda my thing... I dunno I just like using them... Maybe in the future my craze for three dots will fade but for now I feel like they are building ambience... XD Giving the punctuation marks their own seperate lines is something I must do because my speech bubbles are rendered vertically and they get too big if I do otherwise. Also like I mentioned before I want the layout to feel more manga than comics because that's what I am used to. (This is actually my first non-manga comic) If you have any more suggestions please let me know! =^v^=
The three girls were from Lydia's school. The two of them were Lydia's best friends and the blonde one was just a popular... ehem... (trying to talk without swearing or bein offensive) she was... mean and mentally challenged...
Seabiscuit:Aw, this was one of my favorites as a kid
The movie was one of my all time favorites and I was so excited as a kid finding out there was a cartoon
That trippy intro still holds up
I came across the cartoon one or two years ago... I think I was either thrirteen or fourteen. But I fell in love with it. Unlike most people I liked some of the puns. Nowdays if you do a pun you are officially unfunny for some reason. But anyway. I really loved it to be honest ;;
Curiosity shop is a horror/comedy webcomic with new pages posted almost daily (sometimes two pages a day if I feel energized XD). It is centered around a girl called Lillith working in a Voodoo shop called the Curiosity shop. It all seems good and fun until she realizes her boss, Lawrence is not dealing too well wit the paranormal...
(Comic can be found here http://comicfury.com/managecomic.php?id=32382&action=viewstats)