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19th Sep 2018, 4:58 PM #1
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Structurally pretty good, and you do a much better job of distinguishing the characters from the backgrounds than I typically see in black and white comics that have detailed backgrounds. Do think the comic would be easier to read if the pages were center-aligned, though.

Blue Blood Heroes sees the kids learn something about Heather and Valerie on the verge of battle.
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17th Sep 2018, 5:40 AM #2
Lizuka

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Page is constructed pretty well, with a good flow to it and some interesting visuals. Really the biggest grievance I have is with your site layout - it'd be a lot easier to read the page if it were center-aligned.

In Wright as Rayne, Starchild's third fight with McShay goes differently from the previous two.
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10th Aug 2018, 10:06 AM #3
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That did it, thanks for the help.
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"My archive page has turned into one giant Subscribe button.", 10th Aug 2018, 9:42 AM #4
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For some reason clicking absolutely anywhere within where the pages are listed besides on the page links themselves counts as hitting the Subscribe button and it all shows up as a highlighted link when moused over.

wrightasrayne.thecomicseries.com/archive/

Note I haven't updated the HTML in awhile, it's just randomly started doing this on its own for no apparent reason a few days ago. Any idea what the issue might be?
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31st Oct 2017, 5:47 PM #5
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I rather like your expressions, though the joke doesn't really entirely land for me if I'm being honest. Also it's a little odd having the hair change that drastically with the clothes, at a glance it looks like a completely different person.

In Wright as Rayne, Alex and Laura discuss powers and their relationship in a double-length page.
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25th Oct 2017, 7:11 AM #6
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I just try and keep it as short as is feasible. Ideally most chapters would be around 25 pages, but I frequently am more around 30, the next chapter is actually going to be shorter than that, and the one a couple chapters ago made it to 61.
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2nd Oct 2017, 4:50 AM #7
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The art on the whole I think looks pretty solid for so early in, though between the lack of color and the tight zoom-ins it is a little hard to tell what exactly is colliding with what in some of the panels, the THUD one in particular. I'd try and fine tune that going forward.

In Wright as Rayne I really hope it's obvious that Mr. Atlanta is the villain.
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25th Aug 2017, 5:51 PM #8
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Looking good. Art's very clean and flows well, page is structured fine, and I like the look that night sky. On the whole it does a pretty good job of setting the tone and keeping things moving.

In Wright as Rayne, we meet Kadaram as does Ana.
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16th Jul 2017, 5:43 AM #9
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I'd go with a lot more washed out and subtle than what you have going on. It can work, but if you're going to do it it's best to do it the way something like Gunnerkrigg Court does, where it's noticeable but still very slight.
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12th Jun 2017, 2:13 PM #10
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Not entirely clear what they're discussing and I think the font could be a little better, but the page is well constructed and the art's got a very nice look to it, very expressive. Might give the comic a look through sometime, it seems pretty promising.

Wright as Rayne sees Laura's Halloween party having finally wrapped up.
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29th May 2017, 12:55 PM #11
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Admittedly I'm not entirely clear on what's going on here, though seeing the pager in proper context might help out with that a bit. Is an interesting art style though, kind of appropriately smudgy and kind of grimy for the kind of mood you seem to be trying to go for, if a little cramped with the small page size. Though I would maybe try for a better font, it doesn't really fit with the rest of the aesthetic.

In Wright as Rayne, the long-awaited showdown with Blasko doesn't last long.
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26th May 2017, 2:45 PM #12
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Alex is the name of the main character of Wright as Rayne. Most recent non-gimmicky shot I could find of him though, from a couple chapters ago, since the premise is him stuck in the body of a teenage girl named Dorothy Wright.

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He's a powerless atheist bisexual superhero - no code name or anything as himself, but as Dorothy he goes by Starchild - with something of a cynical streak and a tendency to fight dirty but generally very friendly and sociable. One of his biggest concerns is his five-year-old daughter (also named Alex technically, though she goes by Xandy) and the fact that as Dorothy he can't really directly see her.
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26th May 2017, 8:45 AM #13
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Biggest thing that stands out to me is 'trespassing' being spread out along two lines in the last panel. I'd definitely try and watch that sort of thing in the future. Aside from that, page looks great as ever. Kind of need to get caught up, given I'm contributing to it would kind of figure I'd keep tabs but fallen a little behind unfortunately.

In Wright as Rayne, Sareena's escape from Glory doesn't last long.
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19th May 2017, 2:59 AM #14
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Funny, little bit ago I made a compilation thing of what Dorothy looked like in each chapter of Wright as Rayne to date, both normally and as Starchild -

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18th May 2017, 1:45 AM #15
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Little cluttered, but the page looks very nice and flows very well. I quite like your art style and it's a good display of action all around with very good structuring, very nice work all in all.

In Wright as Rayne, Glory tries for a quick finish and pays for it.
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12th May 2017, 3:23 AM #16
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Not entirely clear on the context - I really should get caught up on the comic sometime, keep meaning to - but quite like how it came out. Good art, some good slapstick there, solid pacing. Really only criticism I'd maybe make is could be funnier to see the tail end of the impact itself, would both be more clear exactly what happened and it'd be more impactful. Plus could probably get a silly expression out of it.

In Wright as Rayne, Glory demonstrates her powers.
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6th May 2017, 10:21 PM #17
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I wouldn't really think anything of it.
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17th Apr 2017, 1:21 AM #18
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Put me down for not liking the removed edit and new comic buttons, if only because those were the main ones I used. Other ones are too out of the way for my taste.
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17th Apr 2017, 1:21 AM #19
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24th Mar 2017, 10:44 PM #20
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Good stuff. Does a good job setting a mood and kind of making it really feel like bad things are going down, and in particular I like the way the text is done in the last panel.

In Wright as Rayne, Cassidy doesn't take Sareena's prank well.
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