There's not much I can do to change things at this point, since I'm mostly trying to preserve a story I started writing elsewhere two years ago. That said, honest feedback is always welcome, and I promise not to get defensive. Please be brutal.
I agree with ZeroGee that five pages isn't much to go on, but feel free to take a look at Storm Over Whoomera. There's some nudity and mildish violence in the form of disintegration.
Nightshade the Merry Widow (NSFW, nudity/sex)Comic Fury
Created by Ed Kline and Kishma Danielle, co-writer Lee M, assistance Bob Partridge Storm Over Whoomera (NSFW, nudity)Comic Fury | Renderosity (first page)
Created by Ed Kline, co-writer Lee M
Just got the first issue up of our comic. Would love some feed back if you have the time. Can't figure out how to upload a picture on here lol.
Any ways its a Noir comic, with a female antihero. It centers around a clandestine human trafficking organization, and its down fall. Lot of Greek mythology elements. Issue 1