Just like the title says, my webcomic's chapter has ended so I'm looking for feedback to know how well I'm executing things thus far. Ideally, you'd have read the whole thing. If that's not the case, then the more pages the better. At minimum, the previous chapter 7 should be read. From Chapter 5 if you like the art looking good. Will point out that the first 3 chapters are an origin story. If everything looks hunky dory then say so :)
I just browsed the last few pages and started reading up to chapter 2 so far, and I gotta say the art has improved drastically, as has speech bubble placement. I had trouble understanding what was going on at the start and think it would have been easier just to begin with the introduction of Genus instead of the dream sequence (unless that has meaning later). I'll post again after I've read more ^^
Also, I was expecting Butch to shoot up the school or something. I was holding my breath but it never came, but disregard that if he uses the guns later ^^;;
The dream sequence is mainly foreshadowing of the story tone and a brief glance into Cliff's mind. Butch is later seen (spoiler) maintaining an automatic later on. This clues you in that there are probably gangs in this city and the doberman's social circles might include gun violence. Though it's a bit hazy how he got those firearms in the first place. I strived to improved my comic storytelling each chapter and I'm glad it's helped you with your reading time.
I`m pretty new here so don`t know the story, but I looked at your early pages and then your later ones... Yup, it`s like two different people made it. The art, composition and look has improved considerably. Sorry I can`t quite say much about the plot, but the last fight between the two animal-humans (sorry I don`t know much when it comes to this animal stuff) was interesting... Looks like one isn`t real although she thought she was.
I've read up 3 chapters so far, so I was planning on making a full comment once I reach the end.
I did have 1 comment so far -
the first is that the protagonist doesn't dwell or process the shocking things that happen to him. For instance, when he was locked in a room to fight an opponent to the death, his reaction was quickly resolved shock before he started to confidently attack, even though his fighting skills were not mentioned or foreshadowed earlier (he was throwing good punches!).
When he turns into a girl, he doesn't seem to dwell on that, either. The past chapter had him wandering around in a pink dress with frilled sleeves. He also has long hair, though he had short hair as a boy - but the long hair doesn't seem to annoy him or get in his way. At this point, I'm not sure if the change is permanent or if he has the power to change back, but he never asks that question, either. I feel like a 13-year old boy suddenly in an older, opposite-sex body would have more of a reaction.
In the next few days I should have the rest read and I'll add some comments.
I will chalk it up to the protagonist being a cocky kid, death seems far away for a youth, who consumes too much action media. He got whupped after giving his best shot and he thought he was a goner until his power manifested. He even hurt his hand while trying.
Good point. He's not used to his new body however the comic hints that transforming makes him go to a famished state. Cliff was very exhausted once the adrenaline wore off. He was also dealing with another revelation that he finally found his father who he had searched for years. The foreign body issue was resolved once he figured out how to change himself back, much to the surprise of those who thought it was impossible.
I've read a lot of transformed character stories. I wanted to sidestep the 'particular cliche' that I keep seeing in those stories. Also, I need to keep my content strictly PG-13.
Socratatus:like two different people made it.
Sharp eye. I've shuffled partners as the need comes. Seems like the story is understandable too which is good to know.