You certainly have improved for sure so great job on that!
If I were to be honest, I think you could really benefit from having a proofreader who speaks english as their first language kind of go over your script and give you tips. I mean I enjoy your characters and your art very much as you know, but I think it would really take it to the next level to make that adjustment!
If you want... you can send me a few pages of your script and I can proofread/edit it for you to sound more like the english language and you can compare and see if it helps for future pages.
I'd love to help with that if you still want it! ^_^
I would also be willing to help with the english. My writing is horrible but i do know how to spell most words and how to correct some romance language to english problems. I just wouldn't be able to help with grammar.
So the only thing which I need to improve is still my english xD ? Damn. And I live in england, but talking is much easier than writing :/ damn. It would be easier to find me on discord. Just PM me and I'll send you my discord id.
People normaly don't want to help me for free, so I would be happy if actually someone would like do it because he got time and likes me xD
I did not read much of this. I think it is a bad idea to start of with the FAQ. A lot to read through before the story begins.
I think the icons for "next", "previous" etc should have words on them, they're a bit confusing.