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"Offering Critique!", 9th Feb 2020, 2:42 AM #1
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Apparently I have too much time on my hands. I'd like to see what you guys have and offer my thoughts, impressions and constructive criticisms. I am in no way qualified and I will be fair, but honest.

I'll create a queue of... up to 10 I think. For comics longer than 200 pages, I'll likely only read the first couple hundred.

Show me you read this by naming a character from Avatar: The Last Airbender. :D

A word of warning: I have harsh opinions about most porn. Tread with caution.


Queue will be listed here:
1. jamanning - Superstar Sparky
2. MitchellBrvo - The Loud Era
3. Vivocateur - Eiders End
4. Timishayd - Novice Mistake
5. FireflyJelly - The Extras (in at no. 5 for your excellent pun)
6. Amazing Chris Godbey - Weird in a Can
7. Marvin Lacroix Maqlaqui - The Last Forc
8. mightguy15 - Tsokaka
9. kzuich - The Scientific Adventures of Pear
10. Reapeaggedon - Boss Rush


And a few on standby should I get through these first critiques~

Timelapse11 - The Underground Empire
wr3h - Queens


Will be working through them over the next few weeks! :D
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9th Feb 2020, 3:10 AM #2
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Sign me up.

Show me you read this by naming a character from Avatar: The Last Airbender. :D

Aang
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9th Feb 2020, 3:12 AM #3
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Toph, the coolest character


My comic is much longer, 300+ pages. I don't even remember the last time I got a critique, probably 2014 or so. The older stuff can be brutal to get through and I've had that critiqued before... Chapters 1-6 were all done between 2010 and 2015, chapter 7 has taken me 4 years to complete. I'd prefer critique on chapter 7, since it was released so choppily over the course of all those years I'd like to see whether it flows properly, but I know jumping right to that chapter might make no sense for a new reader.

(just wanted to give some context, especially since my archive isn't correctly backdated yet)

Ugh I'm so scared!!!! XD I'll leave it up to you... read the parts you feel you want/need to read... aaaaaaaaaa
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9th Feb 2020, 3:18 AM #4
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Zuko! A personal favourite :)

I'd really love a critique on an old comic of mine, Eider's End, (t's quite short at only 10 pages) as I'm planning on getting back into comics and I want to know where I need to focus on improving.
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9th Feb 2020, 3:40 AM #5
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Uhmm... Katara? I don't know how to write it. Never watched the show.

Mine is only like seven pages so it will be fast: http://novicemistake.webcomic.ws/comics/1

Please, destroy me! (that's my inner masochist talking)
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9th Feb 2020, 3:47 AM #6
black market meme hookup
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[edit: i think in the end, the direction i'm about to take my comic is so different from everything else so far, including my art which has vastly improved since the previous chapters, that a critique wouldn't be that helpful. thank you for the offer!]
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9th Feb 2020, 4:03 AM #7
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I always like constructive criticism, but I'm signed onto a few more of these and don't want to hog resources. Maybe put me at the back of the line? I'd hate to be near the... Toph.
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9th Feb 2020, 4:19 AM #8
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You can take a gander at Weird in a Can, if you'd like!

I'm at 198 pages, and...oh, no--

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9th Feb 2020, 4:32 AM #9
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The last time i watched it is when I was a kid.
Aside from Aang, there were Zuko and Katara.

Iā€™d be happy to have The Last Force reviewed (link on signature).
It has 43 pages so far.
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9th Feb 2020, 4:57 AM #10
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BustyLaroo:Apparently I have too much time on my hands. I'd like to see what you guys have and offer my thoughts, impressions and constructive criticisms. I am in no way qualified and I will be fair, but honest.

I'll create a queue of... up to 10 I think. For comics longer than 200 pages, I'll likely only read the first couple hundred.

Show me you read this by naming a character from Avatar: The Last Airbender. :D

A word of warning: I have harsh opinions about most porn. Tread with caution.


Queue will be listed here:
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Ayy id love to hear what you think of Tsokaka!
9th Feb 2020, 8:28 AM #11
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I'm always looking for feedback of The Scientific Adventures of Pear!
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9th Feb 2020, 10:12 AM #12
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My comic has 256 pages in total just to warn ya, but yeah. I'd be down for some critiquing!
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9th Feb 2020, 11:33 AM #13
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Could you take a look at The Underground Empire? The link is in my signature
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9th Feb 2020, 12:06 PM #14
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I'm interested if you have the time!
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Two weeks ago, 2:30 PM #15
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Okay so! Doing Eiders End first as it was only ten pages.

My thoughts:

Okay first off I LOVE that cover page. It is absolutely gorgeous. Now for the comic: I really like the neon coloring for that dream like sequence and the weird demon thing the rat turns into. It gives the unnatural feel greater impact, I think. The art is very well done overall. (that dear monster and the hands are fantastic!) I think the humanoid characters are a bit doll-like in their poses though. Their movements could be more fluid and natural. Have some weight to them, y'know? Otherwise you have beautiful details in there and I can see the potential.

It's a bit hard to comment much on the plot since there's only 10 pages so far, but I like what you have going. It's intriguing! It hints effectively, I think, at things to come.


Other than loosening up your people into more natural poses.. I really don't have much to criticize about it. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to more!
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13 days ago, 1:51 AM #16
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@BustyLaro: Thank you so much for the critique! You're definitely onto something regarding those stiff poses (something for me to work on!)
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13 days ago, 9:45 PM #17
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Okay next up is The Loud Era by mitchellbravo!


Art

I like your unique style. It's got a cartoonish look to it, but still has realistic details and wonderful movement. The characters entire bodies are full of expressive movement. That being said, I think perhaps their FACES could stand to be more expressive. Still, I was easily able to tell their moods and vocal tones simply through the way you pose them. So that's really great! The backgrounds, I notice, are very simple. I wouldn't count that as a bad thing though. There's just enough detail to easily tell where the scene is and what's happening, and I find it actually helps the characters stand out more. Nice job coloring, it's clean and fits the style very well. You COULD stand, I think, to pull focus AWAY from the characters a bit. I notice that most of the panels are focused right up in their faces. Showing us the environments more would be nice. :)

Story

I have only read chapter 7, as that's what you asked for. I can honestly say I'm intrigued enough that I want to spend some time reading everything else! Even with my limited understanding of your story and characters I got a good feel for who these people are, what they're like, some of the things they may be experiencing, etc. So well done on that front. You do well at conveying your characters' emotions.
I do think your transitions from scene to scene could be more obvious. At times it was unexpected and it took me a bit to realize we'd moved on to someone/where else. Hmm other than that, I don't have much to criticize. :)

An interesting comic, definitely. I think you're on the right track with it!
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12 days ago, 12:00 AM #18
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Aaah thanks so much!!!

The advice on "pulling back" is something I've definitely got before, and I spent time really trying hard on that in previous chapters (to the point I actually have a list of statistics somewhere where I measured my ratio of close ups, medium shots, and long shots, etc)- I fought to get out of that habit but it appears it's come up again. And I appreciate the callout of facial expressions- I've realized on some subconscious level for a while that I draw mouths kind of the same all the time and I think that causes a ripple effect through the rest of the face. Definitely something worth working on :) :) Very much appreciate your compliment on the coloring. That one's always been tough for me.


I'm glad you were able to feel immersed in what you read so far, and thanks for the note about transitions. I'd hoped changing the border color would be enough of an indication, but I think I might try leaving larger margins at the top of the opening page of a scene and the bottom of the closing page of a scene.


Thank you so, so much for taking the time to read that chapter!! I can put your feedback to good use.
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12 days ago, 2:34 AM #19
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A tip for scene transitions... this would be a really great spot to practice environments! Some establishing shots are fantastic for showing the reader the scene has changed. It can be an entire landscape, or even a close up of a sign on a distinctive street!
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